Които разбират добре от английски! Помощ с редактиране на текст!

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Така значи ще ви бъда много благодарна ако ми кажете къде имам грешки и как да ги оправя. Надявам се, че знаете добре граматиката и ще можете да ми помогнете, защото аз тепърва уча английския добре и за пръв път съставям разказ и искам помощ как да бъде що годе добре. Най-вече пунктуациите и времената ми куцат. Най-вероятно имам много грешки, но се надявам да ми помогнете да ги отстраня.
Ето го и него:
Hello! I am Lisa. Now I will tell you my story for one big party which has happened with many interesting stories. One day one of the identical twins invited me to their party at 8:30pm. I was really happy and in 8:00pm I put on the new dress and went. When I was inside there were a lot of alcohol and drunk people. But I did not care because I do not like to drink. I found one of the twins who I really liked and I started to flirt with him. Later, one girl told me that my friend Tina is here and she is drunk. I was really worried and asked the girl to lead me to her, but instead she locked me in a closet because she lied me. I shouted and pounded on the door, but the music was too loud and no one could hear me. Later, one of the twins find me and then hugged me. After she telling me that is very worried about me. I was very happy. One month later, I asked the girl who locked me in the closet why she did that and she replied that she liked the twins and she wanted to separate us for a while, but he started to look for me and her plan didn't work. I was not angry even we become friends. Now she is with other twins and I with mine and now we are very happy.
Благодаря отново!