I will now tell you
about one big party
which happened

кои са тия еднояйчни близнаци? Уточни малко. Момчета ли са, момичета?

at 8:00 pm

a new dress

there was a lot of alcohol

one of the twins found me

after that he told me that he was very worried about me

even now we're friends.

Now she is with one of the twins, and I am with one

Като цяло... Не е много хубаво написано. Упражнявай се.