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[Momicheto:)]

I will now tell you
about one big party
which happened

кои са тия еднояйчни близнаци? Уточни малко. Момчета ли са, момичета?

at 8:00 pm

a new dress

there was a lot of alcohol

one of the twins found me

after that he told me that he was very worried about me

even now we're friends.

Now she is with one of the twins, and I am with one

Като цяло... Не е много хубаво написано. Упражнявай се.

+ I put on the new dress and went out.
one girl told me that my friend Tina was there (at the same party), drunk.
I was really worried and asked the girl to take me to her, but instead she locked me in a closet. She had lied to me.
Later, one of the twins found me and then hugged me.
I was not angry we even became friends.

Според мен като за първи път си се справила много добре.