Помощ по английски

[Pauch]

Здравейте!

Имам малко проблеми с английския,а даскалката ни даде да напишем съчинение за домашно.Аз го написах,но искам да ви попитам дали имам грешки(в което съм сигурна) и какви са.

Значи на английски ще го напиша.Плс,ако имам грешки да ми ги кажете какви са,защото както споменах съм зле с английския Времето трябваше да е минало,защото трябваше да е случка преди определено време.

Темата на съчинението е:Колко ужасен ден(Whan an awful day)

What an awful day


Last week I had an awful day.The day was Monday.I woke up and saw the clock-it was 8:00 o'clock-too late.I got up from the bed and put on quickly my clothes.
I went to the station,but the school bus went to school at 8:00,so I miss the bus.I had to took a taxi,but I forgot my money at home.I ran to school,but I fell and hurt my leg.I started to walk and I went to school at 8:45,it was too late.The teacher made me a remark.Than she asked me three questions,but I haden't answers.
When I went at home my mother peralized me.I went to my room quickly and there I cryed two hours.
What a lucky,how an awful day?!


Така,знам си,че не е особено смислено и е аднски тъпо,обаче даскалката не изисква особен смисъл.


Благодаря предварително!

[LovePoisoned]

Last week I had an awful day.The day was Monday.I woke up and saw the clock-it was 8:00 o'clock-too late.I got up from the bed and put on quickly my clothes.
I went to the station,but the school bus went to school at 8:00,so I missed the bus.I had to took a taxi,but I forgot my money at home.I ran to school,but I fell and hurt my leg.I started to walk and I went to school at 8:45,it was too late.The teacher made me a remark.ThEn she asked me three questions,but I didn't got answers.
When I went at home my mother peralized me.I went to my room quickly and there I crIed two hours.
What a lucky,how an awful day?! Тук не мога да разбера какво си се опитала да кажеш... Според мен има грешка.

Добре си се справила иначе! =D>

[Pauch]

Исках да кажа:Какъв късмет,колко ужасен ден?!

Благодаря ти мноооого

[lwsu]

пробвай вместо "The day was.." да напищеш, "It was..."

[kriskaaa]

What an awful day


Last week I had an awful day.The day was Monday.I woke up and saw the clock-it was 8:00 o'clock-too late.I got up from the bed and put on quickly my clothes.
I went to the station,but the school bus goes to school at 8:00,so I've missed the bus.I had to took a taxi,but I had forgot my money at home.I ran to school,but I fell and hurt my leg.I started to walk and I went to school at 8:45,it was too late.The teacher made me a remark.Than she asked me three questions,but I didn't know the answers.
When I went at home my mother penalized me.I went to my room quickly and there I cried two hours.
What a lucky,how an awful day?!


Мисля че трябва да е така само за последното изечение и аз нз какво точно искаш да кажеш иначе не е толкова зле

[dshiznit]

Last week I had an awful day.It was Monday.I woke up and saw thatit was 8:00 o'clock and it was too late.I got up from the bed and dressed up quickly.
I went to the bus stop,but the school bus had already left for school,so I missed the bus.I had totake a taxi, but Ihad forgotten my money at home.I ran to school, but I fell down and hurt my leg. I started to walk and I arrived at school at 8:45,it was too late.The teacher made me a remark.ThEn she asked me three questions but I couldn't answer
When I went at home my mother hit me with the rolling pin.I went to my room quickly and there I crIed two hours.
What a luck,what an awful day?! Тук не мога да разбера какво си се опитала да кажеш... Според мен има грешка.

Добре си се справила иначе! =D>

ай и аз малко да се включа в тунинговането.